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I’m still keeping you all intrigued with the beginning of the series [amazon_link id=”B00BEMN5SC” target=”_blank” container=”” container_class=”” ]Changing Tracks (The Dominion Falls Series book 1)[/amazon_link].
This week I’m going a few paragraphs away. Thought a bit of luck, Jane got away from her conversation with the cowboy Johnny, and has returned to her room at the boarding house to try to figure out why it made her so uncomfortable. As luck would have it, Cole’s saloon is directly across the street from the boarding house, so she steps out onto her balcony to seek him out in hopes he can help calm her nerves:
Opening her eyes, she looked down to the saloon in hopes of spotting Cole. Instead her heart twisted to find Johnny staring up at her. She lost control of her limbs. They stumbled back without her order. Spinning, she raced into her room and slammed the door, locking it as well.
She tried to explain away the terror that filled her, but logic gave her nothing. No reason for a stranger to elicit such a reaction. It made no sense.
*No creative editing this week. It just worked. 🙂
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Wow. He really made an impression. Great 8.
Scary things happening to her. interesting eight.
Super writing. You grabbed this reader from the first.
He certainly made a not-so-welcome impression on her. Very interesting. Nice snippet!
Oh I don’t blame her. He gave me the creeps in last week’s snippet. But that is what good writing is all about. 🙂 But now the question is why? Well done!
Excellent Job! I was feeling every emotion with her right away and it pulled me right in!
When does this take place? Mine uses a boarding house too but it’s in 1900
You raise many questions here
That kind of gut reaction is usually spot on…givin’ me the shivers.
I’m curious to know why she reacted that way. Great snippet!
I have a feeling it’s something from her lost memory.
Hmm, sudden, inexplicable terror… From someone who’s lost her memory, this seems especially ominous. I wouldn’t trust Johnny is I were her!
Her body remember what her mind can’t grasp, very well done!