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I’m still keeping you all intrigued with the beginning of the series [amazon_link id=”B00BEMN5SC” target=”_blank” container=”” container_class=”” ]Changing Tracks (The Dominion Falls Series book 1)[/amazon_link]. You know, my amnesiac with the eidetic memory, Jane Doe…and the brothel-owner, anti-hero…Cole Mitchell.
Skipping ahead a little bit. For those that were wondering if Cole really did believe the stories over Jane’s word…well, you’ll just have to read to find out 😉 No, really, it’s a romance, what do you think? More on that another week, for this week…I move to the POV of a man named Michael. Mike is Jane’s brother (that she doesn’t remember) who came back into her life. After last week where Cole “kicked her out”…Jane took off out of town in an attempt to save some kidnapped children. Mike (and another townsperson, Archie) has gone after her, and thinks he spots her with “The Bad Guy”. Oh, and before she awoke a Jane Doe (and kept that name), Jane was Clara:
She jumped and turned, racing from the depot; the man followed right behind.
Mike jumped over the back of the bench in hot pursuit. Before he ever got outside, screams reached his ears. A police whistle sounded through the doors when he and Archie burst through them at the same time.
A crowd gathered near the alley beside the depot and a woman screamed, “She’s dead. He just ran up and killed her.”
Mike’s whole body went numb and he dropped to his knees. “No, Clara.”
*For once, no creative punctuation was used. Can’t guarantee as much for future installments 😉
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Oh dear- such a fast pace and then death! Compelling.
~Decadent
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Wow, great action and intensity! I’m on the edge of my seat! Can’t wait to find out more. 🙂
Action packed eight. Not his sister or the story has nowhere to go. So what happens next?
That was frightening. Your words pushed me forward through the snippet to the most excellent cliffhanger ending.
High drama, much going on in this story! The excerpt moved very fast and I loved the cliffhanger, well done. Great 8!
Oh no! Great action and cliffhanger;).
Now that’s a good way to get me to come back for more. LOL… Great snippet.
She can’t be dead! It’s a romance, isn’t it? She’s probably just really badly injured and unconscious, right? Right? I’ll be back next week and Jane-Clara better be alive, young lady! 😉
Oh no!!! It can’t be Clara. What a cliffhanger, LOL!
Several ways this could go forward, and I’m on the edge of my seat wondering which.
Wow… lots of tension in this snippet.
Oh no! I hope she’s not dead.
This is well written! It moves fast, lots of tension. Good job! 🙂
quite a cliffhanger – you can feel his fear for the outcome, well done
Intense! Can’t wait to see where this goes.