Sunday Snippets 28 – Deep-Fried Sweethearts

Mar 29, 2014 | Books, Holiday, WeWriWa, Writing


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Skipping forward. Michaela went ahead and hired Tag (as we knew she would–his references were impeccable…;) ).  After her first day on the job, she’s talking to her good friend, Eve (who will have her own story later in the year) about her first day working with Tag.

Eve speaks first:

“I just wanted to see how the first day with Tag went, you lucky dog. Side by side with Tag, must have been lovely.”

“It was distracting, not lovely.”

“We are in a mood,” Eve chuckled. “So you still like him?”

“No, I lust after him. Hard to like a child I hardly know.”

“He’s no child.”

*Tiniest bit of creative editing in place, just a wee bit to fit it into the 8

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Michaela O’Keefe is in over her head with her restaurant, The Midway.  Her ad for an assistant manager brings Owen “Tag” Montague to her doorstep. With an impeccable resume and dozens of letters of recommendation, she has little choice but to give him a chance. Ten years her junior, Tag sets her long-dead libido humming, but she gave up on love and her instincts on men years ago.

Tag has had a crush on his new boss since his youth, but he’s determined to prove he can do the job. Still, he can’t resist the urge to make her blush down to her toes as often as possible. He knows her rough past in life and love makes it hard to trust, and he’s wary of crossing the line he so desperately wants to.

Just when they manage to figure out how to work and play together, Michaela’s ex does all he can to destroy their budding love. When push comes to shove Michaela’s inability to give Tag the benefit of the doubt might destroy everything.

Learning to trust herself again is the hardest lesson Michaela will ever have to learn – and by the time she does, it may be too late for love.

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Sarah

31 Comments

  1. Jess Schira

    Lovely interaction between your characters. You’re creative editing was so smoothly done, I didn’t even notice it. Kudos!

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thanks, Jess! I try to make sure it is smooth when I do it. Glad you like the interaction. Eve is a great character…and so is Michaela 😀

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  2. Frank Fisher

    Nice dialogue exchange. It’s hard to fit these excerpts into 8 sentences, so I understand the creative punctuation bit.

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  3. Veronica Scott

    Love this story and I can’t wait for more! another terrific snippet today, very realistic dialog.

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thank you, Veronica!! I’m glad you enjoy the story! I had so much fun writing it…I like when it comes thought. 😀

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  4. Chelle Cordero

    Distracting, huh? Love that reply . I also like her attempt to sound above it all, makes me think she really isn’t. great 8.

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    • Sarah Cass

      Hehe. Yup, Tag is one distracting man…I sure wouldn’t complain if he was distrcting me. 😀

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  5. Sandra Nachlinger

    Good, realistic dialogue between good friends. Methinks she doth protest too much. I’m guessing she doesn’t really think of him as a child!

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thanks, Sandra. I live for dialogue…it always makes me so happy 😀 Hehe. No, she doesn’t think him a child.

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  6. Evelyn Jules

    Love that she ‘lusts’ for him. This working side by side thing ought to get pretty interesting. Can’t wait for more! 🙂

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    • Sarah Cass

      I lust for him and he’s a figment of my imagination. Hehe…yup working side by side is going to be a challenge.

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  7. Charmaine Gordon

    Natural dialogue is absolutely the key to a great scene. And you’ve accomplished this. Terrific eight!

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thank you so much, Charmaine. I do enjoy writing dialogue. If I could write an entire story using just dialogue if I could.

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  8. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Totally get the creative editing! lol Loved the banter here. Wonderfully done scene!

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thanks Karen!! I love banter. 😀 It is my life. lol

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  9. Dani Jace

    Love the snappy dialog. Great 8!

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thanks, Dani!! Glad you enjoyed their exchange!

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  10. Tina Christopher

    Great snippet! Lol, love her response and am looking forward to finding out more;). Well done.

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    • Sarah Cass

      Thanks, Tina 😀 You’ll find out plenty more in the weeks to come 😀

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  11. A.S. Fenichel

    It’s good to have friends to put things in perspective. Love this plot. Great snippet.

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    • Sarah Cass

      Definitely. Friends are essential in matters of the heart 😀

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  12. Gemma Parkes

    Great exchange of dialogue between them. I like that she found him distracting, he may be a little distracted himself!

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    • Sarah Cass

      You may be right, Gemma…he might be just as distracted as she is 😉

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  13. Millie Burns

    Oh me thinks she doth protest too much. Very fun dialogue.

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    • Sarah Cass

      Methinks she doth as well. 😀 We’ll see 😉

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  14. Gem Sivad

    Side by side with the object of your lust, every day, all day. Hmmmm… things could be worse. 🙂

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    • Sarah Cass

      I agree, Gem. I sure wouldn’t mind being stuck in her situation 😉

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  15. Caitlin

    She’s trying to distance herself from Tag, but it doesn’t sound like it’s working.

    Once you get to a certain age, ten years isn’t that much. She’ll loosen up eventually, I’m sure.

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