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I’m back with my travelling wild west show story, Masked Hearts.
I do hate to disappoint you all, but all I’ll say is that after a few days have passed Roy DOES remember his childhood nickname. I won’t tell you what it is, though…you’ll have to read the story to find out. Trust me, it is a good nickname.
Onto this weeks 8. After Roy has revealed himself to be the boy from her past, Roy and Minnie share a brief flirtation which is noticed by Mister – her guardian and his boss. Mister is most unhappy with this development and calls on Minnie to be the object of his display of prowess with a long shot. He’s sent her to stand with an apple on her head, and her fellow Indian cast members are helping her to set up.
John, the nicer of the two men, is getting her into position:
She refused to show him the fear threatening to rip her stomach right out of her body. Instead she grabbed the apple with a small nod. “I understand.”
John moved behind her and set his hands on her waist. He kicked at her ankles before pushing them apart. “Wider stance helps you stay more still. Head straight. This is his warning, he won’t hurt you yet. Trust that.”
*No creative editing this week.
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Minnie Woodward lives a lie. After barely surviving the Bear River Massacre she’s lived in the white world of her guardian Mister Rawlins, her life debt keeping her tied there. The last thing she needs is Roy’s attempts to gain her favor. Her fate’s sealed. She’s never believed in hope, and not even Roy can make her start.
Roy Ornum saves Minnie every night in the traveling Wild West show. The job he took to break his gambling habit brought him a new addiction – her. He knows she doesn’t want to be rescued, but maybe he does. She’s the key to a past he lost, one he wants to find again.
As the two grow closer old wounds are reopened and their burgeoning trust is shattered. When lives hang in the balance of their choices they’ll need to work together. Otherwise everything will be lost before hope can be found.
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The Mister doesn’t sound like someone to tangle with…
That’s a scary place to be at. Oh God!
The statement ‘he’s not going to hurt you–yet.’ Somehow fails to reassure. Yikes!
Yet! He won’t hurt her yet! oh my. The poor thing. Gripping snippet. Well done.
“Wider stance helps you stay more still. Head straight. This is his warning, he won’t hurt you yet. Trust that.” – This is chilling. So well-written too. Wonderful job, Sarah!
Run like hell, girl. I don’t like the odds here. Spine chilling eight.
That “yet” says a lot.
Oh wow. Very intense. Nicely done.
Okay. You have my interest. Great snippet.
He won’t hurt her … yet. Hmm, not really reassuring. 🙂 Intriguing snippet.
Tense indeed and that “yet” is SO ominous! Wonderful excerpt, can’t wait for more.
love the calm with which she says “I understand” despite what’s going inside her; question: who’s talking at the end?
“He won’t hurt her yet” – that’s not reassuring indeed. Tense moment in this snippet. 😀
Mister doesn’t sound like a very nice man. I hope he is a better shot than he is a person.
His attempt to comfort her is little comfort! This is my favorite snippet of yours so far.
Oh my goodness, a wider stance will help her to stand still? I wouldn’t be able to stop shaking. What a “warning”! I don’t like this “Mister”. Great 8.
The idea she has to stand there with an apple on her head for target practice is scary. 🙁
Love the first line “She refused to show him the fear threatening to rip her stomach right out of her body. ” Very visceral. And the “he won’t hurt you–yet” is great! But not so great for her….Great snippet! 🙂
If this guys idea of a warning is to shoot an apple off her head, she needs a new boss, a new job, and a new life. Roy sounds better all the time.
I don’t trust him but I trust the other guy even less,for trying to use her as a target holder! yikes! Run, Minnie!
“He won’t hurt you yet.” That’s comforting! Very chilling 8, great job! Now I want to know what happens!