{WINNER is Jennifer Simpkins!!}
Another Hump Day Hook! Changing Tracks has been quite lovely and taken me on a ride around the internet this month – and is still going. I’m hoping to have a cover to reveal so I can start showing you bits and pieces of Masked Hearts as well – but as for now, you can have another little taste of Jane…and because I’ve been taunting you with Jane and Cole and the cast of this book for so long…I’m going to include a giveaway in the post. One lucky commenter will win a copy of Changing Tracks – in their format of choice!!
This is not a typical paragraph that I’d post – but as it’s primarily dialogue of one liners, I needed to include a full four lines. Jane is asking Cole to assist her in a task that requires them to leave town:
“So will you help me?”
He studied her for a long minute. “What’s in it for me?”
“We’ll take one horse. Two people. One horse. Plenty cozy, don’t you think?”
“When do you wanna leave?”
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Very cozy. 😉
Yes indeed – you should see what he does when he gets her on that horse…he makes sure they are quite cozy 😉
Yes, that has him interested! I like his eagerness to be near her. Love the hook.
Cole is always very eager to be near Jane – even when he’s mad at her. The man has no self-control. LOL.
Great hook, well done.
Thanks, Lucy.
I love that dialogue. Short, sharp and says so much. Great hook.
🙂 Jane and Cole are good with the quick-witted sharp dialogue. They make me very happy 😉
Cozy is always good 🙂
Cozy is definitely always good. Nothing better, really 😉
Lol…I loved this hook. It made me laugh out loud. Great job.
😀 Glad I could make you laugh, Lacie!! Despite the turmoil in their lives…Jane and Cole can very often set me giggling. They’re a lot of fun. 🙂
Two eople one horse. 🙂 Hope it’s a big horse. Nice hook.
Yes it is – Faro is a large white horse – which Jane picks on him for as well. 😉 Of course, even with it being a large horse…coziness is rather required. 😉
Definitely cozy–two to a horse!
Maybe not practical…but definitely cozy 😉
Short and sweet – and great zingy dialogue!
Thanks, Sabrina! I do love dialogue…when I’ve got a quick wit like Jane around, it’s even better 😀
A lot of mileage in only four lines 😉 Very nice!
Thank you, Shelley. Four lines that pretty much describes their relationship in a nutshell…it’s one of my favorite exchanges between them. 🙂
Haha. I like how she only has to mention getting close and he’s like, “Yes! Let’s go!” Like giving a bone to a dog. Nice job 🙂
~snort~ What a great way to describe it. You’re right – the effect Jane has on Cole is very much like that…even when he doesn’t want to respond, he can’t help himself.
Great hook-you packed a punch with such a small teaser!
Thanks so much, Alexandra! It’s always a challenge to pick a hook with these two – but this one just demanded to be shown. 🙂
cozy indeed. wonder how they liked their ride. 😉 good hook! 🙂
LOL. Well, you’ll just have to read it to see how their ride goes 😉 I think for sure their favorite part was getting situated on the horse 😉
That last line made me laugh out loud! It’s amazing how four lines of dialogue can draw a person into a story. Great hook, Sarah.
😀 Glad I could make you laugh, Jennifer! Jane and Cole are a constant source of enjoyment for me, so it’s always nice to know they have the same effect on others. 🙂
Well, she certainly knows how to tempt.
That she does, Ciaran. Very well, indeed. 😉
Ha! Love how he seems eager to be on the way! Lol
Hehe. Thanks Kathleen. He really is eager at the idea of being close to her for a few hours. Does he behave like a gentleman? Well…guess you’ll have to wait and see. 😉