Another Hump Day Hook!
The Tribe has actually been written in first draft for about two years now. Last year I started to rewrite it, but hit a road block a year ago and haven’t touched it since. This past week I got re-energized to pick it back up.
<–That over there is Kane…yummy, no? He’s my MMC, and Nirvelli is my FMC. They are fab, although Velli is by far my most damaged character ever (and that’s saying something, you know?).
Velli does not trust easily and has just finally gotten up the guts to trust Kane, but he’s ordered away, leaving her when she’s at a vulnerable time:
“Vels.” He stepped back and hooked a finger under her chin. When he lifted her gaze to his, he took a shaky breath. “Tell me you trust me. I need you to trust me now.”
“Promise.”
“I promise. I’ll be back for you. I’ll take you away before I let them hurt you.”
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Hum, I’m not so sure about this, Can he really be back on time?
It feels like a dangerous situation. I hope she doesn’t get hurt.
🙂 That is the question. Will he be back, and will she be hurt? I can’t reveal…
And yes…it’s a very dangerous situation…;)
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I hope he did the right thing, trusting Kane. Great hook
Thanks Naomi. He’s trying to do the right thing, but I can’t say if he succeeds or not. 😉
Will he be back? Great Hook!
Maybe…maybe not. 😉 Thanks!
Fabulous hook! I hope he keeps his promise. 🙂
All the best in rewriting this story! I will be doing that, too, later this year. I found new inspiration and a new direction after one of my writing mentors read it over and made suggestions. And rewriting is much harder than writing the first draft.
Thank you, Jessica!! I lvoe these characters. 😀
Thanks so much. Re-writing is so tough! There are scenes that hold a special place in your heart and you lose your senses in the determination to keep them sometimes. lol. 😀
Aww, I liked this snippet. Nice promise there.
Thank you, Sandra. Kane is a good hero…just the right amount of Alpha in him, and the right amount of heart to balance it out…unfortunately, the heroine is sort of an anti-heroine and really makes him work for it. lol.
Great hook, and yummy man! 😉
I hope that we will see more of this scene next week! I need to know if he is able to make it back as he promised, or whether Velli if heading for a whole world of hurt.
Uh oh .. can she trust him? Why does he need to leave … very good hook!