My usual Sunday night post is going to be postponed, so I went in search of a new meme to play with. I found the Weekend Writing Warriors and jumped right in. Similar to my Wednesday HDH meme, this one has a tighter restriction of just 8 sentences.
Since it’s my first week I’m going back to the beginning. Back to [amazon_link id=”B00BEMN5SC” target=”_blank” container=”” container_class=”” ]Changing Tracks (The Dominion Falls Series book 1)[/amazon_link].
So welcome to my new visitors. I’d like you to meet Cole Mitchell, saloon/brothel owner, and the amnesiac with the eidetic memory Jane Doe (Some creative editing involved…if you read the books there will be a few more period, a few less commas 😉 ):
“Who are you?” Her soft voice drifted from the bed, quiet, but demanding attention. Her deep blue eyes sparkled with hidden amusement, “Or rather, why would you barge in so boldly on a room full of women?”
From where he stood, he could see her pale skin, the sunken eyes, all the faint signs of weakness she worked hard to hide. Her spunk covered most of it more effectively than any of his whores’ powders could have done. He nodded, “Name’s Cole and you threw up on me, so you owe me a shirt. How ‘bout you, who are you?”
“I—well, I’m not sure.”
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Nice! Flows smoothly. The premise is good–and this snippet left me wanting to read more . Well done! Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors! It’s nice to have you. 🙂
Thanks Teresa! I’m glad it left you wanting more. That’s always my goal 😀
It’s great to be part of WWW!! I’m having a lot of fun reading everyone’s snippets. 🙂
Your descriptions work here- i was able to see it all. Great job.
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Thank you so much, Summer. I’m glad my descriptions were good enough to see!
Intriguing beginning! Terrific snippet…
Thanks so much, Veronica! This story is my baby, I’m glad it drew people in!
She threw up on him?!? Akward! Then she obviously has to reason to complain about his sudden presence. A very engaging snippet from the opening sentence!
LOL. Yes she did, Frank. Granted, she had a serious head wound and they’d actually thought she was dead at first…but she did throw up on him. 😉
Very nice intro with descriptions that made feel like I was in the room – nice snippet! And welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors!
Thank you so much, Susan. I’m always concerned about my descriptions, so I’m glad to hear you felt that way!!
Welcome to WeWriWa! This snippet tells a lot about the world, the characters and their relationship, all the while making me feel like I’m in the room with them. Very nice!
Thanks, Emilie! I’m thrilled to be part of the WeWriWa! I’m definitely planning on turning this into a habit. 😀
I’m glad you were able to get so much from a short snippet. The interactions between my H/h are always so much fun. 🙂
Nice description and an intriguing beginning.
Thank you, Elaine! I’m glad you like it.
Oh, I like this guy – can’t wait to find out more about him. 🙂
LOL. thanks, Danita. He can be a bit of a scoundrel and unlikable at times, but it’s all part of his charm. 😉
Nice snippet! Can’t wait to read more.
Thank you Sandra. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
I could see her owing him some laundry, but a whole new shirt seems excessive–especially since she doesn’t seem to have much.
Like her attitude. 🙂
LOL. She did ruin a shirt, and up until this moment he didn’t realize she didn’t have anything but her memory…despite her near-death state she’d been well-dressed. The shirt does play an important role later on in the story. 😉
Thanks. I love her attitude as well. Jane is still my most beloved character.
Amnesia and a brothel. Now that’s going to be fun to write. Great 8!
LOL. I was a stitch to write. I love this story and characters and really hop to extend their story next year 🙂 I hope you enjoy the snippets as I reveal them!
Intriguing snippet. Left me wanting to know more.
Thanks Karen. I’m glad you want to see more! I’ll bring more snippets in the coming weeks.
Very nice! Left me wanting more.
Thank you, J.A. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Very intriguing! I love her answer. 🙂 And I’m looking forward to reading more snippets to find out where things are headed.
Thank you, Donna! Jane is actually quite clever and capable for a woman with amnesia. She and Cole are opposites in some ways, and very similar in others. They have many issues…and they are severely flawed, but they grow and change and become better people. I can’t wait for you to find out where they go 😉
It’s an interesting way to introduce oneself…Hi, you threw up on me, you owe me a shirt : ) Since she probably doesn’t remember the incident…I’m looking forward to seeing her reply next week : )
😀 Thanks, Millie! These two go back and forth quite a bit, they are really fun to write (and read, I’m told). Glad you liked the snippet!
Well that’s certainly an interesting way to meet!
Intriguing premise. Great 8. 🙂
Great writing. Well done.
A great way to start. You have me wondering about who she really is already. And I’m curious, does she realize where she is yet? I look forward to reading more. Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. 🙂
Definitely want to know more! Intriguing 8!