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I’m still keeping you all intrigued with the beginning of the series [amazon_link id=”B00BEMN5SC” target=”_blank” container=”” container_class=”” ]Changing Tracks (The Dominion Falls Series book 1)[/amazon_link]. You know, my amnesiac with the eidetic memory, Jane Doe…and the brothel-owner, anti-hero…Cole Mitchell.
Skipping ahead a little bit. While Cole was unconscious from his injuries, many more revelations about Jane’s past are revealed, and some bad things have happened that many people are blaming on her & her past. Cole has woken up and spent some time with Jane, but then she is called away and Graham has his own chance to spin his version of Jane’s story to Cole. Cole lashes out…or does he? Cole speaks first:
“Get out of here, ya lyin’ jezebel!”
Jane’s strangled gasp echoed through the room. Cole’s words pierced her heart worse than any other reaction she’d gotten to the revelation of her past. She’d known what he’d say, had expected it, but it didn’t make it hurt less.
Graham chuckled behind her. “Told you. Get outta here.”
She couldn’t lift her eyes to look at Cole. She knew if she did, she’d break.
*For once, no creative punctuation was used. Can’t guarantee as much for future installments 😉
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It’s so easy to blame it on Jane. I’m kinda mad at Graham, plus Cole didn’t need this.
It’s no fun when two men want a woman to leave. I wonder why Graham agrees with Cole. Engaging 8!
Powerful snippet full of attitude and angst.
You pulled this reader in. It hurt to see cruelty toward Jane no matter her past, right or wrong.
I can feel her pain and I’m mad at both men and…..wow, your writing really pulls me into this story. I love it! Excellent excerpt 🙂
I feel her pain in this 8. great job
Ouch. I feel for her. Powerful snippet.
I’m hoping Cole was talking to someone else, but as far as I know the only woman in the scene is Jane. Is he trying to get her to leave to protect her, or does he really think that ill of her. Poor Jane!
I’m with Kate — does Cole believe the lies, without even getting her side? I’d hope he was a better man than that.
Obviously there’s more than one version of Jane’s past.
Aww, poor Jane! Graham’s version of the story is clearly not kind to her–I hope Cole realizes that it isn’t necessarily true.