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I’m back with my travelling wild west show story, Masked Hearts.
I was surprised (and a little amused) at how many people commented on the chemistry/dynamic between Minnie and Carl…considering Carl is not the hero of the story. So, to help with that, I thought I might show a little of the hero himself, Roy.
This is after the previous scene, when Roy (in character) has charged onstage to ‘rescue’ the ‘fair maiden’ Minnie was made up to look like. The show they’ve just put on takes place in an army camp, so Roy insists on escorting her home for her safety. Minnie is confused and upset by her attraction to the white man that joined their troop some time ago – and his persistence in trying to talk to her doesn’t help. Here she tries to refuse his assistance:
“Makes no difference,” Minnie pushed against him, trying to sit of her own volition. “The moment I change out of this costume and show my true self my virtue is in jeopardy; it’s the only thing the Mister cares to protect.”
“Well, I’m concerned with protecting everything.”
“And I have no need for your concern or protection.”
“So you’ve told me.”
She shoved aside his arm and jumped off the moving horse. After a brief stumble she righted herself and lifted her chin.
“You’re a stubborn woman.”
*Creative editing used this week to fit in the 8.
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Minnie Woodward lives a lie. After barely surviving the Bear River Massacre she’s lived in the white world of her guardian Mister Rawlins, her life debt keeping her tied there. The last thing she needs is Roy’s attempts to gain her favor. Her fate’s sealed. She’s never believed in hope, and not even Roy can make her start.
Roy Ornum saves Minnie every night in the traveling Wild West show. The job he took to break his gambling habit brought him a new addiction – her. He knows she doesn’t want to be rescued, but maybe he does. She’s the key to a past he lost, one he wants to find again.
As the two grow closer old wounds are reopened and their burgeoning trust is shattered. When lives hang in the balance of their choices they’ll need to work together. Otherwise everything will be lost before hope can be found.
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Great dialogue and tension between them. I’m looking forward to reading the whole story.
Thanks, Gem! I don’t know why I always forget this one…it always makes me smile when I dig it back out.
I’m having a giveaway for this one right now (ends tonight) if you’re interested: http://redefiningperfect.com/secret-cravings-western-romance-blog-hop/
That’s funny, I’ve been on a Western kick lately. ;D
Great dialogue!
On a Western kick is a GOOD thing, Steven 😀
And thanks! I pride myself on my dialogue. I’m working on the rest 😉
Love this snippet! Your dialogue is very natural and showcases the characters well. Great 8!
Thanks, Jenna! I do love my dialogue. So glad you appreciate it 😀
Stubborn indeed! Jumping off a moving horse. lol. Love her personality! Can’t wait for more! 🙂
lol. Yup, if that isn’t stubborn, I don’t know what is! Thanks, Evelyn. I really love Minnie. She’s been through a lot, and holds her heart close…yet she’s strong. 🙂
She is stubborn, but I get the impression he’ll respect her more for it. Good snippet, Sarah.
Thanks Siobhan!! He does respect her more for it. Roy’s not my typical hero (I usually go for/write the alpha dominant man…Roy’s far more calm and quiet)…but he’s pretty damn awesome 😉
I could feel the tension. Great snippet.
Oh, I liked her. A strong-minded heroine and an equal hero who won’t give up is always fun to read. Great snippet!
Lol, wow, jumping off a moving horse to get away? I hope he has strong self-confidence or he’ll get a complex;). Intriguing snippet.
Great snippet. It makes me want to learn more about the characters.
One question: “…trying to sit of” should that be “set off of”?
Thanks, P.T!
No, it’s “sit of her own volition” He’s got her in his arms after he “rescued” her during their stage show. She’s trying to sit without his support.
Super good eight. You’ve set the scene so well. She’s a feisty woman, a character to love.
Really good scene–Minnie is stubborn indeed (but so am I).
Good dialog. Like the blurb too. Intriguing story.
Is she fighting her attraction to him? I love your dialogue and the tension between them.
I continue to be so intrigued by the unusual setting and I enjoyed the exchange between the two characters today – great snippet!
Haha, I love her already 🙂 Some great characterization, and great interaction between the two!
Love the dialogue and the premise. I’d love to read it!
Fantastic dialogue. These two are going to be fun together.
Oh she’s adorable. I like her already!