Hump Day Hook – Week 10

Jan 15, 2013 | Books, Changing Tracks, Hump Day Hook, Writing

derailedcovermedTime for another Hump Day hook!  Edits on Changing Tracks  are done.  I have since written another short story and sold it, and am about to dive into an hours push of writing on Into a Mirror Darkly again.

Since I don’t quite have my cover art with the publisher logo back yet, I’ll refrain from another snippet from Changing Tracks until next week.  If I don’t have it by then, I’ll use a random picture from my files. 🙂

So, just for kicks I’m going to post one of my favorite snips from Book 2 in the Dominion Falls series, Derailed. My main character, Jane…preparing for…well, you’ll see:

Simple. No petticoats, no corset. One well cut layer of fabric.

Plain. Rough black wool. No adornments, not even a visible button.

A dress of death. Her death.

Pale skin shone back at her in the mirror.  Shaking hands pulling her tresses back into a simple bun. No hat, no coat. The bitter cold temperatures would mean little to her welfare. Illness wouldn’t claim you if you were already dead.

 

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Sarah

24 Comments

  1. Paloma Beck

    This is intriguing. Great hook! 🙂

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    • Sarah

      Thanks. I am pretty sure everyone is going to want to throttle me at the end of my books. LOL. My character goes through hell. 😀

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  2. Kerrianne Coombes

    Ooooh, Whats going on? Why is she so hard about her imminent death???

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    • Sarah

      🙂 I am looking forward to everyone finding out! There’s a reason for her attitude toward this death. Here’s hoping my publisher snatches up the whole series so you can see why 😀

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  3. michelle hoefle

    Wow, what’s going on about her death? Is she going into marriage or facing the guillotine? Good hook.

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    • Sarah

      Hehe. didn’t think anyone would believe it to be a marriage! Nope, definitely not a marriage…

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  4. Kathleen Grieve

    Omg! Why is she going to die???? Have to know! Great description of her impending doom!

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    • Sarah

      😀 Can’t give away that secret yet, although the reason is hinted at in Book 1, Changing Tracks…which will be out in February 😉

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  5. Lacie Nation

    Great hook! Really pulls the reader in.

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    • Sarah

      Thanks, Lacie! I hope so!

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    • Sarah

      Thanks! For some reason writing the whole scene from this to her walk to her death were so much fun to write…to get so deep into her head for this.

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  6. cree walker

    Very well done. I’m hooked.

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  7. Jessica Subject

    Oh my gosh! I have to know what happens next! Great hook!

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  8. Flossie Benton Rogers

    Ooooh, what has put the hand of doom on her? I want to know more about Jane’s situation. Great hook!

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  9. Ciaran Dwynvil

    It’s a great description! A sad hook but very powerful.

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  10. Taryn Kincaid

    Intriguing! If that doesn’t pull a reader in, nothing will!

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  11. Phoenix J

    Oooh interesting… Has me intrigued!

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  12. Jennifer Simpkins

    I’m so mad…that was not enough, Sarah! LOL. Please post more. 🙂

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  13. Colette Saucier

    Oh wow! Awesome hook! Definitely got my attention! When is this going to be released?

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    • Sarah

      Collette,

      this is book 2 in the series, so I don’t have a release date yet…but book 1 comes out next month!! 😀 I’ll be doing a cover reveal this week for HDH!

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  14. Gem Sivad

    You definitely have my attention now. What a great description of her preparing for her own death. Fabulous hook!

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