Hump Day Hook – Week 16 {Derailed}

Feb 26, 2013 | Books, Changing Tracks, Hump Day Hook, Writing

ChangingTracks_LRGAnother Hump Day Hook!  Once again I’m bringing Jane Doe to the party – but this time I’m responding to a request to see a paragraph from book 2 in the series, Derailed. As I don’t have a cover yet, you get my Changing Tracks cover.

This is the opening lines of Chapter 2 in Derailed.  Jane and Cole are much relaxed in their room:

“I was sixteen.”

Jane grew completely still, the finger that had been dancing along his chest froze in place. Cole never spoke about anything beyond his years in Dominion Falls. For a moment she wondered if she should let him go on.

 

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17 Comments

  1. Angela Brewster

    What!? That’s it!? That’s all your going to give me!? So waiting for book two! Sighhhhhh 😉

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    • Sarah

      LOL! Yup, Angela…that’s all you get. Hump Day Hook is just a paragraph at a time, after all 😉 You just have a few more months until book 2. 😉

      Reply
  2. Kerrianne Coombes

    Oh?? What is that about? I want more. I felt the tension.

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    • Sarah

      🙂 I’m glad I made you want more. It’s the first time the hero reveals much of his damaged past (it was hinted at in book 1)…and it has a huge impact on what is soon to happen with the H/h. 😉

      Reply
  3. Angelica Dawson

    Great hook. I’m curious about his past and the relationship that is finally letting him share it.

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  4. Gem Sivad

    Dominion Falls seems to have been a turning point in Cole’s life. I’m frozen, waiting for more too. Great hook!

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  5. Jessica Subject

    A fabulous hook! What happened when he was sixteen??

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  6. Lucy Felthouse

    Ooh, very tense! I look forward to more.

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  7. Sandra Sookoo

    Wow, what a cliffhanger. Nice job 🙂

    Reply
  8. Sherry Gloag

    Oh, I want to know more. What a hook.

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  9. Elin Gregory

    Sixteen, eh? That’s young to be traumatised. Great hook.

    Reply
  10. Mandy Earles

    I was sixteen and…? Ah, you are killing me. I want to know his past. Great hook!

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  11. Naomi

    You can’t stop there! I want moruch more LOL

    Reply
  12. Flossie Benton Rogers

    I want to know more about his past and how it formed his present. Nice hook!

    Reply

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