Another Hump Day Hook!
And this week it’s time for something new and completely different!
One of the WIP’s I’ve been working on in the background is a story for a holiday submission call. It’s tentatively called Santa, Maybe although I’ve also had the quirky suggestion of Holiday Peace (which both fits the story and matches the fact that I keep calling it my “holiday piece”. :D). I wish I could settle on a name, but it’s just not happening.
If this book is contracted and published, all proceeds will go to the Cystic Fibrosis Foundation. 🙂
Anyhow, here’s one paragraph from this WIP…just one…don’t hate me:
“No. No more wishes.” She had to get a grip on herself or she’d fall back into the trap. Sniffling against the tears, she pulled back and swiped at them. Her fingers pressed to the bridge of her nose to try to settle them down. “This has to be the last time we walk away from each other. There’s nothing else left to wish for.”
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Ouch. What a sad and painful snippet. I can really feel the emotion in just this short paragraph. Great hook! Makes me wonder why she has to walk away.
🙂 This entire chapter killed me, Mandy. LOL. While I love to bring on the trauma drama, I hate when it leaves me sobbing over my keyboard as I type. lol. Hopefully it gets picked up and you’re able to see why she’s walking away (or he’s walking away).
So sad. Every one needs something to wish for. Nice emotions here.
Thank you, Kathleen. I knew the minute the scene ran through my head and left me in tears I had to write it. I just hope the whole scene conveys the emotions that ripped me apart while writing it. 🙂
That is a fabulous hook packed with so much emotion! I hope you’ll be sharing more! 🙂
Thanks, Jessica! I might share another hook of this couple next week…one a little less painful 😉
Though it’s sad, it’s a fabulous hook. Can’t wait to read more!
Good luck deciding on the title 🙂
Thank you so much, Cassandra. I’m glad you enjoyed it, even though it was sad!
And thanks. I’m going to need all the help I can get with this darn title! LOL
Such a sad, emotional excerpt. Isn’t that what grabs readers? We want a bit of the pain characters go through to reach their HEA. It makes them feel authentic. (And I’m so jealous you are working on your holiday book already. I have the month of July carved out for mine!)
It sure is what grabs me, Paloma. I love the drama and torment…the work real, flawed characters have to go through to find that HEA. Ivy and Alan have surprised me with their story…I fell in love with them fast.
And…LOL. I shouldn’t be working on it. I should be working on re-writes and a horror piece that’s due May 1st (instead of this which isn’t due until September)…but once these two grabbed hold of me, they refused to let go until I wrote 🙂 Good luck with yours!
Arghhhh. It is gut painful. Makes me hurt too.
Thanks, Flossie…I am happy to know that I can evoke the emotions in everyone with this short little section that I felt writing the whole scene!!!
OH I could feel the emotion. Great hook!
Thank you, Lacie. That’s always the hope, that the reader feels the emotion. 🙂
*sniff sniff* Nice one. *sniff*
How sad, and intriguing at the same time. Makes me wonder why they’ve walked away from each other before…
Way to tug at the heartstrings! Great hook!
So sad for her. 🙁 Nice way to keep us wondering.
good emotion in the snippet. does make me wonder why they have to walk away from each other. thanks for sharing! 🙂
C.R.